Hey! I really liked these poems-they are so relevant and it is an important topic to write about. You did a great job adding so much weight and emotion in such short poems! The strength of these poems really show. I would love to read a poem on a different subject as well. You wrote these so well, I would love to see how you could include different emotions in a Twitter poem. Overall, great job!
These poems did an effective job of conveying your emotions as a mix of anger and confusion with an over arching sadness. Your most powerful poem was your middle haiku, because of the middle line "two explosions heard by all". It tells so much with few words, which is exactly what a haiku should do. My only comment would be that your hashtag in the last poem was a little redundant. The point of the hashtag is to add something extra to the poem and illuminate it in a certain way, and I think you could push your poem forward with a stronger hashtag.
These poems conveyed so much meaning. I really felt them throughout each one. However, I don't think this is what Professor Miller wanted for this assignment. Either way they are so good!
It seemed like these were more like actual tweets than twitter poetry. The style was very prose-y with limited use of poetic elements. The tweets contained abstractions, and barely any images. I think the author did a good job conveying emotions--confused, sad, angry, distraught, hopeful. The author could employ more techniques we learned in class to show us these feelings rather than state them straight out.
Hey! I really liked these poems-they are so relevant and it is an important topic to write about. You did a great job adding so much weight and emotion in such short poems! The strength of these poems really show. I would love to read a poem on a different subject as well. You wrote these so well, I would love to see how you could include different emotions in a Twitter poem. Overall, great job!
ReplyDeleteThese poems did an effective job of conveying your emotions as a mix of anger and confusion with an over arching sadness. Your most powerful poem was your middle haiku, because of the middle line "two explosions heard by all". It tells so much with few words, which is exactly what a haiku should do. My only comment would be that your hashtag in the last poem was a little redundant. The point of the hashtag is to add something extra to the poem and illuminate it in a certain way, and I think you could push your poem forward with a stronger hashtag.
ReplyDeleteThese poems conveyed so much meaning. I really felt them throughout each one. However, I don't think this is what Professor Miller wanted for this assignment. Either way they are so good!
ReplyDeleteIt seemed like these were more like actual tweets than twitter poetry. The style was very prose-y with limited use of poetic elements. The tweets contained abstractions, and barely any images. I think the author did a good job conveying emotions--confused, sad, angry, distraught, hopeful. The author could employ more techniques we learned in class to show us these feelings rather than state them straight out.
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